You have a few unnecessary commas in your piece, but I assuming that they are there for effect. So I will leave them alone.
He wished he had a personal assistant, maybe a helpful pretty blonde named Cynthia, to get them for him, but, alas, he had to get his own. Add commas.
So he posted to his LJ about it, and was (not so) surprised to learn that no one (or almost no one) else had heard about it, either.
Then the boss called, and said he needed to meet with Brian unexpectedly after work. Brian had planned on going out after work with the guys, and was a bit miffed at the sudden meeting. Commas are not needed to join two verbs.
"No, I talked to the lawyer, and this is totally compliant with the contract terms..." Add comma.
Your income tax return for the last 2 years, your profit, and loss statements Add comma.
He was a bit... embarassed about the number of times he had let things ride, and was determined to take the bull by the horns. Comma is not needed to join two verbs.
Hm, that didn't sound like he was really going to be working on any contract, and, if he did, it would be something that Brian could in no way sign. Add comma.
And while he knew he would land on his feet, taking that leap into the unknown, was a bit nervewracking. Move comma.
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You have a few unnecessary commas in your piece, but I assuming that they are there for effect. So I will leave them alone.
He wished he had a personal assistant, maybe a helpful pretty blonde named Cynthia, to get them for him, but, alas, he had to get his own. Add commas.
So he posted to his LJ about it, and was (not so) surprised to learn that no one (or almost no one) else had heard about it, either.
Then the boss called, and said he needed to meet with Brian unexpectedly after work. Brian had planned on going out after work with the guys, and was a bit miffed at the sudden meeting. Commas are not needed to join two verbs.
"No, I talked to the lawyer, and this is totally compliant with the contract terms..." Add comma.
Your income tax return for the last 2 years, your profit, and loss statements Add comma.
He was a bit... embarassed about the number of times he had let things ride, and was determined to take the bull by the horns. Comma is not needed to join two verbs.
Hm, that didn't sound like he was really going to be working on any contract, and, if he did, it would be something that Brian could in no way sign. Add comma.
And while he knew he would land on his feet, taking that leap into the unknown, was a bit nervewracking. Move comma.